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06 April 2009 @ 12:09 pm
New Fic-Star Wars-Obidala-"Stardust"- Rated G  
I took some requests on my personal journal to get my writing juices flowing again. Here is the first one :)

[info]lealynnkenobi requested a happy obidala fic :)


Title: Stardust
Author: Nicole
Rating: G
Genre: Friendship/Pre-ship
Pairing: Obi-wan/Padme
Chapters: 1/1
Summary: a moment shared between the two on a balcony, late at night.
Notes: this is unbetaed, so please forgive any gramatical errors, feel free to point them out as well.
Word Count: 357




A familiar tremor in the force brought a small smile to Obi-Wan‘s lips.

“Padme, is that you?”

“It always amazes me when you do that.” She stepped outside and joined him on the balcony.

He chuckled and drank in the sight of the Senator as she walked to his side. She wore a long, flowing, lavender dress. Strapless. It stirred something in him, she always did. He kept his face passive and forced his hands to stay clasped behind his back.

“It’s a lovely night.” She whispered, her eyes stared straight ahead, but Obi-Wan didn’t think she was actually seeing anything.

“You’re troubled.”

She sighed and leaned against the railing.

It wasn’t a question, and they both knew it. “Sometimes it’s annoying how perceptive you are Master Jedi.”

“Only for you, M’Lady.”

He smirked.

She smirked back.

“It’s these negotiations.”

“It’ll all work out in the end.” Obi-Wan replied.

“You know that for sure?” She cocked her head.

“Of course. They don’t call me the Negotiator for nothing.”

She shook her head, but her eyes were full of laughter.

Without thinking, he moved closer to her, their shoulders almost touching.

He felt something from her in the force, something different than her normal affection. “I like your hair.” She blurted.

He raised an eyebrow.

She laughed. “I’m serious. I like it shorter. It reminds me of how you looked when we first met.”

“Well, thank you. I like your hair as well.”

She laughed again. It made him feel things he had so long tried to ignore.

“Obi-Wan, look!” She pointed towards the sky. A bright light, surrounded by red sparks, streaked across the horizon. “A falling star.” She breathed. “Don’t you think it’s beautiful?”

Obi-Wan found his eyes drawn back to her. “Yes.” He whispered. “I do.”


“We should do this more often.” Padme sighed.

“Stand on balconies?” He quipped.

She placed her hand on his forearm. “Talk about nothing. Watch falling stars. I feel more relaxed than I have in days.”

“I’d like that.” He found himself replying.

“How about tomorrow night? Same time, same place.”

“I’ll be here, M’Lady.”

“I know you will.”



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Deadpan Snarker: screw canon[info]sw_fangirl on April 6th, 2009 04:53 pm (UTC)
I like this. The scene is peaceful. :) (And it kind of ties into a fic I wrote, which I find interesting. :D )

If you'd like a quickie beta'd version, I'd be more than happy to do it for you. (I'm an editing nerd and have lots of time on my hands today.)
Ti'ana Luthien: LMS[info]tianaluthien on April 6th, 2009 06:11 pm (UTC)
Just had to say...I LOVE you icon. It is awesome, because it is so true...
Deadpan Snarker: alderaan shot first[info]sw_fangirl on April 6th, 2009 06:14 pm (UTC)
I know, right? :D I got it specifically because my favorite character in SW is Anakin, and GL just decimated that man's personality. And turned him emo. So yeah ... screw canon. XD

I dig your icon, too! :D
kenobifan: Dreams we didn't waste Obidala[info]lealynnkenobi on April 6th, 2009 06:19 pm (UTC)
That is a cool icon! "Screw Canon" I do that so well... hee
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 01:02 am (UTC)
thank you :) that is interesting i'd love if you would give me a link to it :)

sure i'd love it :)

(and i second the icon love)
Deadpan Snarker: gravity[info]sw_fangirl on April 7th, 2009 02:53 pm (UTC)
Here's my profile at FF.net ... the one I'm talking about is "Diversions" (and the pertinent chapter would be ... hmmm ... 5). It ties in in a rather dark way - I think I'm constitutionally incapable of writing something light and perky, plus my fic's Anakin-centric and I don't think that dude could be light and perky if he tried - but for me at least, your ficlet as tied into my snowballed one-shot (heh) took a lot of the malice out of the entire thing. (You'll see.)

Sent you a PM with the beta'd version. :D



Edited at 2009-04-07 02:53 pm (UTC)
kenobifan: who knows (Obidala)[info]lealynnkenobi on April 6th, 2009 05:43 pm (UTC)
That was beautiful, Nicole.

Romance is in the air... both in character.

“Don’t you think it’s beautiful?”

Obi-Wan found his eyes drawn back to her. “Yes.” He whispered. “I do.”

My heart turned into a pile of goo, when I read that.

Thank you, from the bottom of my goo. LOL

Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 02:09 am (UTC)
yay!! i'm so glad you liked it, i was a bit worried, i feel like i'm shaking the dust off my fingers lol.

i was quite fond of that line :)

Ti'ana Luthien[info]tianaluthien on April 6th, 2009 06:10 pm (UTC)
Excuse me while I

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

Ok. That was lovely. Subtle romance, gorgeous imagery, and in-character. Excuse me while I reread it now... :)

Eesh, I love this 'ship...
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 02:10 am (UTC)
**blushes**

you are too sweet, thank you so much hon :) that means a lot.
yappichick: P/C hands[info]yappichick on April 6th, 2009 06:15 pm (UTC)
Awesome story! You did a great job of making them feel in character while showing their feelings. Great stuff! :D :D
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:25 am (UTC)
thank you so much i really appreciate hearing that :)
E. Schemer: wiped.the.internet[info]e_schemer on April 6th, 2009 06:55 pm (UTC)
I agree with sw_fangirl: I like it for the peace and quiet, it seems very canon in a way a lot of Obidala isn't. Very nice job :)
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:25 am (UTC)
thank you :) i try to keep my characters "in character" so to speak :)
Mya Scarlet: obiwanpadme[info]mya_scarlet on April 6th, 2009 07:03 pm (UTC)
Aww, lovely! A great little moment of happiness!
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:26 am (UTC)
thanks hon :)
thrace_adams: Charmed shiny[info]thrace_adams on April 6th, 2009 07:10 pm (UTC)
OH that was really lovely...friendship with just the hint of underlying tension. Really beautifully done :)
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:26 am (UTC)
thanks so much hon :) i'm glad you liked it :)
noobianrose: O/P TPM black border[info]noobianrose on April 6th, 2009 08:21 pm (UTC)
Beautiful. It's very peaceful and the dialogue (which is something I pay close attention to especially in Obidala) feels spot on. Just felt right. Well done. And thanks to Lynda for the request!
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:27 am (UTC)
thank you so much hon :) i'm really glad to hear that about the dialogue, i always try to keep them in character :)
Paige: Saffron B.[info]mumblebeee on April 6th, 2009 11:42 pm (UTC)
*SQUEEE*

This is a very lovely fic hon! Very very awesome.
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:27 am (UTC)
thanks hon :)
Sunny[info]sunny_serenity on April 7th, 2009 12:24 am (UTC)
How lovely.
Nicole: juliet[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:27 am (UTC)
thank you :)
Bill A[info]billa1 on April 7th, 2009 01:27 am (UTC)
Wow! Very nicely done! :)
Nicole: kitty/lance[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:28 am (UTC)
thank you :)
F. J.: houseoficons; ewan belly![info]someplacetobe on April 7th, 2009 03:46 am (UTC)
Why ‘Stardust’ for the title? It doesn’t seem to fit.
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 7th, 2009 11:28 am (UTC)
because of the falling star and it just honestly felt right to me.
F. J.: houseoficons; ewan belly![info]someplacetobe on April 7th, 2009 01:06 pm (UTC)
Very cool.

Overall, it was a lovely li'l 'fic.
Nicole: ducks[info]bleeding_muse on April 8th, 2009 07:31 pm (UTC)
thankies :)
Sue[info]sue_chose_this on April 7th, 2009 01:59 pm (UTC)
Very nice.
I love my Obi with a bit of dala on the side occasionally :)
Nicole: swtrio[info]bleeding_muse on April 8th, 2009 07:32 pm (UTC)
thanks hon :)
Nadia: MOV: Obi-Wan & Padmé[info]artphilia on April 7th, 2009 02:53 pm (UTC)
Oh dear, this is such a wonderful, tender moment. I love it a lot! :D Please crosspost it to my archive as well.^^ http://obidala.net :D
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 8th, 2009 07:33 pm (UTC)
thanks so much hon :)

i'll have to check that site out :)
moowithme113: sw//obi-wan and luke[info]moowithme113 on April 8th, 2009 01:17 pm (UTC)
Awwwwwww. Beautiful!! I have a soft spot for these two, and it is ALL your fault.
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 8th, 2009 07:35 pm (UTC)
thanks hon :) lol i'll gladly take responsibility for that :)
pronker: easter[info]pronker on April 8th, 2009 05:32 pm (UTC)
Others have spoken about the IC dialogue, so I'll just say that that 'Stardust' title fits with the Carmichael song, tender and romantic.
Nicole: swmovietrio[info]bleeding_muse on April 8th, 2009 07:35 pm (UTC)
thank you :)
morning_aura: <lj user=" title="morning_aura: " />[info]morning_aura on April 12th, 2009 12:57 am (UTC)
Generally, usually don't like Obi-Wan paired with anyone, but you make this seem so in-character that I can't help but squee a little bit.

Besides, I really dislike Anakin/Padme. The dialogue makes my brain hurt.
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 15th, 2009 01:44 pm (UTC)
thank you :) i'm glad you liked it :) and it's great to hear they seem in character :)
rowenamarion: lack of pants[info]rowenamarion on April 20th, 2009 06:55 am (UTC)
ooh. very nice. :)
Nicole: obidala[info]bleeding_muse on April 23rd, 2009 01:41 am (UTC)
thank you :)